Im not asking you to write perfect reviews and that all reviews that exist in the world should all be of the same format. It is good to have character. What I am asking of you is to feel the need to best yourself with each new one. I see that you've at least modified a few of the stuff I mentioned. GOOD!
By the way, Warren's English is excellent, you could learn a word or two from him. Not to sound like an ass (I woukdn't be surprised if that's what you take me for) but since you're aspiring to get more reviews done, justifying all sorts of flaws should have its efforts put into learning instead. What if you get denied on a big one just because your formatting is not up to par? Would that not be vexing?
Ultimately, all I am saying is for you. If you still think you are doing well, do it your way. You are improving but ever so slowly. There are plenty of bad reviews on Head-Fi but I can't be bothered to pick on all of them. YOU are in AAMML so I am trying to help you, even in this busybody method as you certainly did not ask. All I will say is that since you are posting reviews on Head-Fi and that I should consider you a friend, I want your good reputation to rise and your bad ones to go away. People are reading, and the reviewer has the responsiblity for his own works. Why settle for worse when you can do better? Take it as you will. As the resident "labeled as an *******", I say it once again: this is for your own good, take it as you will or churn up your even better version of it. Dont be showing us half-baked writeups all proudly. Make us proud for this one or at least the next one.
Looking forward to it!
He basically had no problems with my reviews right now, and saw it as my own style
BUT, he did critique it in that I use too many words for the same idea. And that I should be showing not telling, and to produce more consice ideas. That will be done in my BW Delta review later in the week or next week.
Fischer Audio unveiled its new triple balanced armature IEM recently and the press’s went wild. FA has been known to be a great value audiophile company for a long time now. So many wondered if the TBA-04 was the same. Their full size studio line came out to glowing reviews, so is this the same? Today, Panda Tech Review, gives you a look at the Fischer Audio TBA-04. Let’s see how it is.
Notice- This is a unit provided to me by Fischer Audio.
When Fischer Audio (FA) recently unveiled its triple balanced-armature earphone, the press went wild. Having a well-established reputation in the audiophile community, FA is known for their good bang-for-the-buck audio products. Upon the announcement of the TBA-04, many people wondered if it would live-up to the the same value and sound quality as their full-sized studio headphones. Does the TBA-04 meet the expectations set by FA's full-sized headphones? Today, Panda Tech Review gives you a look at the Fischer Audio TBA-04. Let’s see how it is.[/quote]
IMO, too long for a introduction for an Internet review. Might work better on specialist magazines but still a handful to read.
Hard to rewrite with my phone atm. Can try to condense it when I get home.